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[DEDICATED POEM]: Smile

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Offline AlundraTopic starter

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[DEDICATED POEM]: Smile
on: 3:30 am Tuesday, April 29, 2008
Smile
DEDICATED: Mutt

Smile for me baby
It just melts my heart
Come now baby, donít you hide it
I see that smile start

Come give me a hug now baby
Let me hold you near
I aint gonna leave you baby
Eradicate that fear

Smile for me baby
Youíve never looked so good
Come now baby, donít you hide it
I never thought you could

Come hold my hand now baby
Letís walk side by side
Iím gonna tell you everything
I hope we can confide

Smile for me baby
I aint seen you like this
Come now baby, donít you hide it
Itís your smile that I miss





WRITTEN: April26-28, 2008
REVISION: No
UP FOR REVISION: Not really..
INSPIRATION: Muttís smile
RELEVANCE: Yeah :P

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Re: [DEDICATED POEM]: Smile
Reply #1 on: 8:30 am Tuesday, April 29, 2008
Sweet. Very positive, not depressive like your other stuff. How did it feel?

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Re: [DEDICATED POEM]: Smile
Reply #2 on: 9:50 am Tuesday, April 29, 2008
nice poem

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Re: [DEDICATED POEM]: Smile
Reply #3 on: 9:55 am Tuesday, April 29, 2008
Sweet. Very positive, not depressive like your other stuff. How did it feel?

Good, I kept picturing his smile and it made me smile. I just hope he likes it :).

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Re: [DEDICATED POEM]: Smile
Reply #4 on: 11:18 am Thursday, May 1, 2008
You could sing this one. This is your first happy poem then?

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Re: [DEDICATED POEM]: Smile
Reply #5 on: 11:25 am Thursday, May 1, 2008
Well no....It's for the dedicated section because it's dedicated. Happy poetry has one poem, but if you ignore the dedicated part, it's probably the 5th or 6th...

Cause we have The Puppy, A Goose and a Duck, Rhianna's Poem, Sunshine, and My Two Best Friends...

So yeah, it's the 6th lol =D

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Re: [DEDICATED POEM]: Smile
Reply #6 on: 5:02 pm Wednesday, May 7, 2008
I love it

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Re: [DEDICATED POEM]: Smile
Reply #7 on: 11:25 pm Wednesday, May 7, 2008
Danke :D

I love it too :D

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Re: [DEDICATED POEM]: Smile
Reply #8 on: 4:03 pm Tuesday, August 12, 2008
You could sing this one.
I was thinking the same, Phil Collins maybe.......no wait this one is for The King, Elvis Presley. :yay:

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Re: [DEDICATED POEM]: Smile
Reply #9 on: 6:55 am Wednesday, August 13, 2008
It's a fast paced poem, so Phil Collins wouldnt suit, unless you compare to "strangers like me" which is fast!