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[POEM]: Untitled (sonnet form...sort of)

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Offline AlundraTopic starter

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[POEM]: Untitled (sonnet form...sort of)
on: 11:28 am Saturday, September 13, 2008
Untitled (sonnet form...sort of)

When loneliness comes knocking on ones door,
When depression stalks thou into the night,
These new feelings not encountered before,
That fruitless feeling you feel need to fight.
When all your happiness and joys take flight,
And your silent tears are falling like rain,
And when darkness distorts your once keen sight,
Do you ever question if you are sane?
Your heart is breaking before your own eyes,
Reach up to the heavens for help you beg,
Can anyone hear your desperate cries?
The glass of life you suck from; the last dregs.
Can't you hear the darkness calling your name?
Can't you feel its tight grasp sucking you down?



WRITTEN: Unknown.
REVISION: Not a revision.
UP FOR REVISION: No.
INSPIRATION: Was an English assignment..
RELEVANCE: No, not really.

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Re: [POEM]: Untitled (sonnet form...sort of)
Reply #1 on: 12:56 pm Saturday, September 13, 2008
Its actually quite a good description of depression and disassociation.

Offline AlundraTopic starter

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Re: [POEM]: Untitled (sonnet form...sort of)
Reply #2 on: 11:26 pm Saturday, September 13, 2008
I'm glad! That's what I was aiming for (I feel it was a sort of fail poem).

 

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